Thesis Draft Comments

Comments on thesis draft:
1. Table of Contents: Move numbers to right edge of page, possible color code
Graphic to represent the green invasion

2. 11x17 fold out sheets (as numbered in draft): map only from page 66, 70, 71, and an additional sheet similar to the previous 2, 73, (1) new page with elevations following page 75, (2) more new pages following page 83 (plans of the north site invasion)

3. Updates to all rendered images will be made, including the inclusion of shadows, and more entourage. Descriptions of these images will also be made

4. Remove portions of summary proposal to logical sections of the thesis (such as case studies)??? Comments welcome

5. Updates to citations per Turabian Chicago Style, throughout the document.

6. Move page numbers??? To right edge???

7. Add graphic for cover

8. Include graphic sidebars for schematic review (update but as shown on pg 30 and 31)

9. Add more sketches from sketchbook

10. Spruce up the continuity and clarity of the masterplan portion of the thesis, organizationally and descriptively

11. Provide a comprehensive technology statement, fix page graphics

12. Provide detailed description of the community center site, etc. Including renderings of natural recovery interaction areas for public.

13. Add specific agencies to key players diagram. Provide site value data, tax data, and description of public to private involvement.

Thesis Draft Document

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